catko: (angel corridor)
catko ([personal profile] catko) wrote2008-07-16 01:24 am

Stumper

Rating: PG
Category: Buffy the Vampire Slayer
Disclaimer: Don't own
Words: 240
Summary: Encounter in the Mausoleum, The Harvest. For [community profile] fantas_magoria.


When you've got 240 years, memory, well, it works in a strange way. His past is like a corridor in an old hotel, stretching back, doors on both sides. He can't see all the way to the end, or rather, the beginning. But he can walk back and revisit each moment, the years, the decades, centuries down through time. As if he would want to. Why would he want to?

Sometimes a memory would yank him backward, like being sucked into another dimension. Or dropped from another dimension, naked and snarling, into a past age. Landing with a thud in a place, a self he doesn't want to remember. It might flash up with sudden vivid reality. Torches burning, women screaming, hot sweaty horse snorting between his legs, pounding across a field. Or the dreamy lassitude that overwhelms the senses as he sinks his teeth into an ivory throat, and feels the blood rising between his lips.

But now, at this moment, he can find no memory. No picture in his mind, or feeling in his—uh—soul. Nothing. The end of her question hangs in the air of the marble chamber.

"… have a friend?" Friend.

The silence travels 240 years but lasts only an instant. Framed by the iron door, Buffy's face moves from impertinent to puzzled, almost tender. Her lips part, and her voice is soft as she says, "That wasn't supposed to be a stumper."


 

[identity profile] chrisleeoctaves.livejournal.com 2008-07-16 12:23 pm (UTC)(link)
I really loved how much you've put into one tiny exchange. Buffy obviously doesn't know Angel's history- but he must live every day...all too aware of what has come before, and that - as you so eloquently put it- endless corridor that stretches ahead.

Lovely.

[identity profile] faymeadows.livejournal.com 2008-07-16 12:58 pm (UTC)(link)
240 words for 240 years? Neat.

Oh, I love imagining what it's like for these ancient vampires to have memories going back centuries. Poor Angel - he is so wigged, so awkward, and trying so hard in these early encounters with Buffy. Your words convey all of that, powerfully. Nice foreshadowing, too, with the references to an old hotel and being dropped from another dimension. Reading this was a delight! :)
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[personal profile] jerusha 2008-07-16 02:08 pm (UTC)(link)
Very nice. I watched this just yesterday and was struck by that moment. Your ficlet captures it well.

[identity profile] brunettepet.livejournal.com 2008-07-16 04:45 pm (UTC)(link)
This was a beautiful capture of the weight of history in these centuries old creatures. It gives poignancy to Buffy's reaction to Angel over thinking the question.

[identity profile] scythematters.livejournal.com 2008-07-16 10:35 pm (UTC)(link)
Nice expanding of this little moment. I liked the "old hotel" reference since I'm currently watching Season 2 of Angel, so that put the Hyperion in mind.

[identity profile] librarian2003.livejournal.com 2008-07-16 11:14 pm (UTC)(link)
What a super little vignette. I really like the economy of words, with nothing wasted, and how the corridor of memory goes both ways.

Lovely!

[identity profile] thismaz.livejournal.com 2008-07-17 04:50 am (UTC)(link)
That is very nice. I love the visual references to future scenes, but I particularly love the sensation of time contracting - the way complex thoughts can occur in a split second between one utterance and the next. Lovely.

[identity profile] ares132006.livejournal.com 2008-07-17 06:23 am (UTC)(link)
Your economy with words amazes me. So much is packed into this small but wonderful passage.

I did like Angel's memory being compared to a hotel and that sometime he could be yanked back naked and snarling to relive a moment.

"… have a friend?" Friend.

The silence travels 240 years but lasts only an instant. Framed by the iron door, Buffy's face moves from impertinent to puzzled, almost tender. Her lips part, and her voice is soft as she says, "That wasn't supposed to be a stumper."


Oh! Such a moving moment. *sniff*



[identity profile] markeyisapunk.livejournal.com 2008-07-25 04:55 am (UTC)(link)
very pretty. thank you.

[identity profile] lycomingst.livejournal.com 2008-08-24 05:03 pm (UTC)(link)
Ah, there's such a gulf between them.

Very nice. 8 ]

[identity profile] dref22.livejournal.com 2010-12-21 12:04 am (UTC)(link)
That was the first Buffy fic I read. XD Nice! You made me want to watch it again...